This is my first story to post online for others to see, so feedback is appreciated. There is a setting info page along with the actual intro. I will work on getting the map up somewhere.

The Smith Chronicles Intro and Ch.1 is posted

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  • PlatinumOtter
    While giving some info at the beginning doesn't hurt, a big expository lump can turn off readers. I especially object to your MUST READ statement regarding the main character coming back to life. That is a central plot tenant that you have completely telegraphed before the story even started. You could have built tention around the first time the character died on screen and now instead I'll be expecting it. Not good.